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Developments in technology are causing environmental problems. Some think the solution is for people to adjust a simpler life while others believe that technology itself can solve the problems. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

#developments #technology #think #people #life
Nowadays
Accept comma addition
Nowadays, technology
technology
 is a vital part of the day to day life, and its the major asset for the development of the nation,
although
 it causes environmental problems. Some people that
peopopine
a sharp explosive sound as from a gunshot or drawing a cork
popping
 technologies
solve
Suggestion
Solve
 problems A country which is advanced in
technology
 is considered the most powerful, and they will control the world. In current period
technology
 is
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
, mobile, computer, digital tv, drone cameras etc. A person can do a video conference with someone who is far away, and
also
tranfer
transfer somebody to a different position or location of work
transfer
 data, file in the form of electronic copies
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 seconds. With the growing
technology
, a person can travel to
moon
Suggestion
the moon
 if he wants, can travel to anywhere in
this
 world.
Submitted by Shinoy Kaladharan on

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