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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree or disagree?

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As an old saying “a
friend
 in need is a
friend
 indeed”. Help friends in difficult situations is an acceptable social behaviours. Lending
money
 is the most sensitive manner in all cases. Many people say that borrowing finance from a buddy has negative effects to the
friendship
. I do not agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons which I will explore
further
 in the essay.
First
 of all, I believe that when friends lend and borrow wage from each other it means that they trust and help each other.
For example
, four years ago, when I had faced the lack of budget for establishing my company, I did not find any way to solve
this
 problem. At that time, one of my best
friend
 noticed my situation and accepted to borrow
this
money
. Her assistance allowed me to better my business. I believe that borrowing
money
 from a
friend
 and returning it on time can not harm
friendship
.
In addition
, lending
money
 to a
friend
 might make the
friendship
 more tightened. Take me as an example, I have a good buddy who lent me the amount of
money
 to buy a book I liked when I was 10 years old. I shared my problem that I didn’t raise enough
money
 to get the book and needed his financial help. He was
pleasant
Suggestion
pleased
 to allow to pay a part of the book’s price for me without demanding me to give back immediately.
Consequently
,
friendship
 between
I
objective form of "I"
me
 and he has become closer.
Lastly
,
Therefore
, they will attempt to figure out ways to help their friends who supported them to surpass difficulties in the past. In conclusion, borrowing
money
 from a
friend
 is a more convenient and flexible option one can have. I think that borrowing
money
 and returning it will help to keep friends together. People should not be afraid to borrow
money
 from friends when they really need help. It may strengthen the bond of
friendship
 during difficult times.
Submitted by bebe Huyền on

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