One long-distance flight consumes fuel which a car uses in several years’ time, but they cause the same amount of pollution. So same people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than to limit the use of cars. TASK: To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Despite the fact that fuel emissions from
the
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car
and Fix the agreement mistake
cars
flight
are the same, vehicles consume five times less gases than aeroplanes, and to solve Fix the agreement mistake
flights
this
problem the government proposes cancelling unnecessary flight
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flights
such
as a
tourist Correct article usage
apply
trip
rather than restricting the use of cars. I personally disagree with Fix the agreement mistake
trips
this
statement as it will cause great resentment among people as well as
it is not the biggest dilemma nowadays.
First and foremost, it is not solving this
problem, as it is two main ways of moving. Furthermore
, individuals, travel for different reasons it would be medicine
, work, studying, exploring, Change preposition
as medicine
developing
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and developing
as well
as
they will always travel to relax and Correct word choice
and
diversity
their surroundings. As an example, we can take the period during the quarantine, when all flights were cancelled and the situation with our pollution did not advance and Replace the word
diversify
as a result
individual
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individuals
moving
by car.
Apart from air pollution, there are numerous problems connected with the environment, Wrong verb form
moved
such
as climate change, water pollution, unsustainable waste generation,natural disasters and so on. Last
but not the
least, I am convinced that to change our environment we should Correct article usage
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firstly
change ourselves. Change the word
first
For instance
, we could handle this
complication if we could increase control over industrial waste-discharge
and adopt more environmentally friendly materials and production equipment.
In conclusion, I would like to say that both cars and aeroplanes have a negative effect on our globe, but it is not a positive way to Correct your spelling
waste discharge
be discouraged
tourist air travel Wrong verb form
discourage
instead
of limiting the use of private cars.Submitted by Maria on
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