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Governments should spend more money on medical research and less on researching the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #research #environment
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Medical
research
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 has become an important thing to discover new vaccines and medicines to prevent and cure a lot of chronic diseases in
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 world.
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, environmental
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 has
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 become an indispensable thing to save the people and planet from disasters.
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 of giving scope to private corporations,
government
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 should initiate their own
research
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 for the greater good cause for the people. In every fiscal year,
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government
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the government
 should give a significant amount of budget allocations for these two aspects. In
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 essay, I will describe the importance of
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government's role
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the government's role
 in the
research
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 of health care and ecological system, and I will disclose my opinion at the end of the topic. On the one hand, it is argued by a lot of people that,
government
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 is collecting the greatest amount of taxes from the public to provide good health, so it is the responsibility of
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 to invest in medical
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. In
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 contemporary world, people have become more prone to disease on a frequent basis.
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, governments should focus on
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 and development of vaccines and medicines to save their citizens from deadly diseases.
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, the entire world is suffering from Corona virus right now because there is no vaccine for that disease.
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,
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 should be flexible with its budget allocations for the purpose of medical
research
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 to invent the antidote.
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, few people argue that environmental
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 should be given less importance when compared to the medical
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. It is a prejudice.
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Accordingly to
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Accordingly, to
 the Bloomberg survey, every year 1 Million people are dying because of natural disasters like Tsunami, Cyclone, Drought, and Floods.
Government
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 is the only organization that can help people overcome
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 crisis. With advent of satellite technology, we can anticipate Floods, Tsnunamis and Hurricanes, so that we can warn people in advance to vacate those places to save their lives. To illustrate
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,
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 year in South India there was a massive flood accident with no human loss.
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 happened only because of
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 due diligence by using space technology and environmental
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. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the given statement.
Government
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 should give paramount budget allocation to the ecological
research
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 rather than medical
research
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.
Submitted by B Rama lingeswara Sai on

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