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the number of cars stolen for every 1000 vehicles in four countries from 1990 to 1999.

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The line graph compares the number of cars stolen for every 1000 vehicles in four countries from 1990 to 1999. Overall, it can be seen that car thefts were far higher in Great Britain than in the other three counties throughout the whole time frame.
To begin
, car thefts in Sweden, France and Canada followed a fairly similar pattern over the
first
 five years, all remaining at between 5 and 10 per thousand. The general
trend though
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trend, though
for
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in
 France and Canada was a decline in the number of vehicles stolen over the period, with both at around 6 in 1999.
In contrast
, Sweden experienced an upward trend, starting the period at approximately 8, and finishing at just under 15. Interestingly, car thefts in Great Britain started at 18 per thousand, which far exceeded that of the other
countries
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country
. It
then
 fluctuated over the
next
 nine years, reaching a peak of 20 thefts per 1000 in 1996, and ending the period slightly lower than where it began, at approximately 17 per thousand.
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