The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These pictures describe the interior
appearances
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of
bookshop
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a bookshop
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in 2000
,
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while
comparing it with now.
Overall
, it has
been
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made great changes significantly, but some places still remain as same as they were twenty years ago.
Firstly
, it has not
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seen almost any changes in the location and size of the travel and the new books section
as well as
the service desk has just stayed on the left corner of the building.
However
, another three small sections (art, hobbies,cookery) and the huge non-fiction part have been completely replaced
to
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the cafe and three tables for it.
As a result
, a considerable amount of size has been reduced in the fiction section by 2000. Obviously, the new design of
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the bookstore
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bookstore
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bookstores
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provides more leisure time for customers with selecting, reading and enjoying
with
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different types of books.
Moreover
, the readers
have
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occupied the cafe for drinking coffee and relax by reading books.
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