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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.?

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The number of inhabitants in urban areas is dramatically increasing for the past few decades, which results in desperate complications.
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 essay will chiefly focus on two drastic issues ensuing on overpopulation in cities and some viable remedies to tackle the matters. The increase in population of municipal areas is the primary cause of environmental pollution. People have a buoyant demand for commuting to work and travelling in towns by cars and motorbikes.
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, the immense amount of exhaust fumes including higher carbon dioxide is emitted directly into the air, which makes severe impacts on the atmosphere. Household waste, is one of the pressing issues in cities, which has been rising in an amount along with the increase of population. In some areas, the streets and rivers seem to be littered with full of plastic rubbish without any hesitation.
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, the considerable need for housing in overpopulated municipal areas is
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 a predominant issue, so that various towering buildings have been being built.
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, the price of a house or even an average apartment becomes more expensive, so that low-class residents
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 as workers and vendors are unlike to afford for housing. There are several possible-counter deeds that could be taken to eradicate problems described above. A
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 solution would be for governments to allocate money from the government budget to invest in public transport across cities. Along with that, governments should exhort local inhabitants to make full use of public vehicles by offering subsidies.
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, shopping centres should take advantage of recyclable bags
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 as paper-made and biodegradable bags to contain commodities to prevent consumers from throwing away plastic garbage everywhere.
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, governments could remedy the situation by conducting a project of public apartments to give workers and vendors a stable accommodation to live with low cost. In conclusion, various measures could be taken to grapple the problems that are certain to stem from the rise of residents in towns.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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