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Write your opinion. Do you agree or disagree with the author? Why?

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Place matters most for the development of
a
Suggestion
an
 infant. According to the author, people should prefer a metropolitan
city
 over a village. In my opinion, big cities are a better place for children.
Firstly
, living in a metropolitan
city
 is more stressful than living in a village, as the cost of living is high. The environment in the countryside is pure.
For instance
, the pollution level of Delhi is highest, while it's vice versa in the villages of India. Children who grow up in a big
city
 have more opportunities. If a minor wants to sing, dance, or play a musical instrument, he or she can easily find different teachers or clubs. A juvenile who is interested in sports has a lot of sports to choose from.
In addition
, most big cities have excellent museums, zoos, art galleries, and libraries.
Therefore
, children can spend their evenings, weekends, and summers learning about many different subjects. By experiencing a wide range of activities, children will be able to find out what they like and maybe find a special interest.
Secondly
, despite some disadvantages, the number of advantages will overshadow it. The children will develop their perspective to see the earth along with ample opportunities available for their career.
For example
, children can choose their interested field as their career option, as they can easily find different teachers or clubs. Children can develop
a
Suggestion
an
 earth view in a big
city
. In big cities, there are people from many different backgrounds. It is good for young people to meet people from different cultures It prepares them for the real world. They can learn ideas or opinions that are different from the ones they are used to. By meeting people from all around the earth, a big
city
 teenager is more likely to consider many different solutions. In conclusion, despite preferring village life, parents should choose metropolitan cities for more opportunities in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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