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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there?

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This
 graph compares the people’s
number
 of visits to the three most popular exhibits from the zoo each month. As an overview, at the beginning of the year, the
number
 of visitors is about 175,000 people. The
number
 of visits has increased steadily since January, reaching the highest
number
 in August, which accounts for about 500,000 people at an average of three exhibits. Suddenly, it
fell
mat together and make felt-like
felt
 deeply down to 200,000 in November; afterwards, it slightly increased for about 50,000 in December. Taking a closer look at the graph, it is noticeable that the variations of each exhibit are minor in January and November.
By contrast
, July has the highest differences in visitors.
Moreover
, it is apparent that ‘Giant Pandas’ is maintaining the most popularity in the zoo. From the fact that a greater amount of people have visited the ‘Giant Pandas’ over ‘Aquarium’ and ‘Penguin Encounter’ throughout the year.
However
, in January and December, the
number
 of visitors in ‘Penguin Encounter’ leapt over the ‘Giant Pandas.’
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