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You invited your family to have a special celebrate dinner in a well- known restaurant, but you are unsatisfied with the meal. You are writing to make a complaint. In your letter, you have to say: - What the situation is - What the problem is - What you want them to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding the service provided by your hotel.
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 week, I visited your restaurant with my family to celebrate my father's birthday as we wanted to make it memorable for the whole family. Unfortunately, your meal was far below our expectations.
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, we ended up with disappointment.
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, we waited for almost an hour for our food.
Secondly
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 and most importantly, the food was cold, when your staff member brought it to our table.
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, prices were so high that I did not match the quality and quantity of the food. To rectify
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 problem in future, you should take corrective measures
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 as improving quantity and quality so that customers do not feel as disappointed as us.
Also
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, quick service should be provided to your customers to maintain your reputation. I would like to receive a refund because we had so high expectations but it was totally
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Correct article usage
the opposite

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 . Yours Sincerely, Rajat

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task response
Consider providing more specific details about the food and service experiences to strengthen your complaint and provide context for your dissatisfaction.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear progression of ideas within your paragraphs to enhance overall coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Rephrase 'I would like to receive a refund because we had so high expectations but it was totally opposite' to something like 'I would appreciate a refund, considering our high expectations that unfortunately were not met.' This maintains a polite tone while clearly expressing your request.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a greeting and closing, which is good for coherence.
task response
You effectively conveyed your disappointment and the reasons behind it, which is important for task response.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complaint
  • satisfaction
  • underwhelming
  • culinary experience
  • quality of service
  • underprepared
  • inattentive staff
  • dissatisfied
  • subpar
  • compensation
  • address the issue
  • customer service
  • hospitality
  • special occasion
  • celebratory dinner
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