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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At the modern time, it is noticeable that
technology
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 has been improved a lot and provided a huge amount of changes to communities in different areas. Some people argued that the development of
technology
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 will eliminate the most significant environmental issue in the future. While it is true that science could make a contribution to
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environment
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the environment
,
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however I
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however, I
 believed that laws or policies could
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 take part in help make our planet better. There are many advantages to make people believe that technological improvement could settle problems from
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environment
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an environment
the environment
.
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, there are many solutions provide by scientists to tackle the most obvious issues
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 like air pollution.
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, many cars could be driven on the load by using batteries which could generate the power of electricity in stand of gasoline, so that these cars could reduce the amount of emission of exhausted gas to zero.
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, there are many renewable energies was invented to be used in products and
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 is accountable to huge levels of improvement of
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.
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, without
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 development, our planet could be suffered.
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, I suppose that to confront those
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environment
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environmental
 issues could not only be relied on new
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, but
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 ourselves - human being should play their parts to protect the places where they are living. Governments could enforce nations to take actions on environmental conservation
by laws
a rule adopted by an organization in order to regulate its own affairs and the behavior of its members
bylaws
 and policies.
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 is because not every single person could understand the importance of environmental protection and laws could bring citizens to focus on the behaviours to benefit living places.
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, some countries implement the rules to ask their nations to recycle every wastes and encourage factories produce their production by using recycled materials.
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, these policies could be beneficial to make their
environment
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 better. In conclusion, I believed that
technology
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 developments play an important role in protections of
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environment
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the environment
, while if these improvements combine with people's proper behaviour could lead to maximise the efforts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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