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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are various opinions on gender based education and schooling, as some believe that same sex schools are better than mixed schools.
This
 would review both statements and conclude on my personal opinion on the issue. While the general consensus thinks that mixed schools are most suitable for students as it helps build their social and interactive skills with both sexes. They are better exposed and are more trained on emotional skills and mingling with their peers.
This
 is an additional factor in teaching growth skills to these students that will be useful after school. Whenever there are situations in public these boys and girls can effectively manage themselves.
Although
 the other party to
this
 thought on gender based schooling justifies their stand by reiterating that the students are more focused on their education with little or no distractions from the opposite sex.
Also
 education is very key in
this
 setting because
that is
 the primary aim of schools. Particularly where the children are being groomed for superior educational achievements namely scholars or genius trainings. They require no complications or additional nurturing by the teachers based on
this
. In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
while I might be wrong.I believe mixed schools are more beneficial to young students as they learn how to interact with other pupils in both social and educational circumstances. They have better people skills and can prioritize their daily growth with their studies effectively. They grow up to be more effective workers and managers due to
this
 exposure.
Although
Suggestion
Despite
 the distractions might be too much and would require more attention from their Teachers and Parents to streamline their focus at each time.
This
 would expose them to real life situations and teachings on how to handle the lifestyle
in particular
.
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