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Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent whould you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society

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It is undeniable fact that, technological developments have a massive influence in individuals’ lives. Television is one of the greatest inventions in the technological field. There is an argument regarding the impact of TV on the culture and tradition of social life. In that statement, my own view is that, the positive outcomes overweigh the drawbacks. The prime reason for believing that it is beneficial, television connects the people globally. Because, by the means of TV sets each and every individual can get to know about news, which are happening all around the world.
For instance
, numerous news channels have been developed to show the live telecast of incidents. Another decisive role of
this
 electronic medium is the entertainment. The public gets a chance to know as well as to feel the diverse civilization globally by means of serials, movies and reality shows. These all have a huge impact on society.
However
,
on the other hand
,
this
also have
Suggestion
also has
has also had
 a bad influence in some cases. The
first
 drawback is the distractions from studies. Learners nowadays have a habit of watching TV throughout the day, which makes their eyesight weak. At the same time, due to continuous sitting, obesity and sluggishness will develop, at
last
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least
 they will become less productive by watching idiot box, people are forgetting the importance of culture and tradition, the reason is, recently people have a really less amount of interest towards society. To cap it all,
this
 electronic medium has a great positive outcome. The public have acknowledged it in the very appreciable way, they cherish
this
 thing. But in a small extent, there are some unacceptable factors, which should be overcome for the betterment of society and with respect to culture.
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