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Some people believe that the fittest and strongest individuals and team always success in sports,others think that success in sport depends on mental attitudes.Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #individuals #team #success #sports #sport #attitudes
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Few people opine that able-bodied, physically active person with strong leadership and teamwork absolutely will win the
game
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however they
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however, they
 said that
success
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 relies on the psychological
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of a
player
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This
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will discussed
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will discuss
 both sides. In my opinion to attain
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 in every competition
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a
team
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 member should possess a good physical and mental ability skills
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 Sport is a great source of lessons for life.It teaches us to take nothing for granted for greater and treat others with respect. Sports teach us how to work as a
team
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.A person must be physically fit and well endured and know how to deal with other
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team mates
a fellow member of a team
teammates
.It is
one
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 of a criteria in winning a
game
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. Being a
team
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player
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 is rated very highly as if
one
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 knows how to interact and cooperate with others to work together as a
team
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 and not individually.A
team
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 needs
members
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members'
member's
member
 commitment, determination and tenacity as well as unity.To cite an example, in a basketball competition, the
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 is under pressure where the ball is
at
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in
 his hand in
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last
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due to his endurance skill and full support from the
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tehy
people in general
they
 competitively win the battle...
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important factor
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an important factor
 as competitor to have
strong and healthy body
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a strong and healthy body
 as well full support of
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 members to attain
success
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 should be a good sport meaning able to accept loss,Having a good mental skill, a well-disciplined, good work ethic and exercising self-control, a person can able to maintain composure in the face of disappointment is a life skill worth mastering and keeping cool head in the midst of intense pressure are factors to
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 , an advantage at battle time.
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one
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 sport survey shows that their
team
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 had many violations and fouls where a
player
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 make a wrong move in the battleground injuring his opponent because of his bad
behavoir
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
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lack of patience and self control
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 led to automatic expulsion from the
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 group.
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Nevertheless
, obtaining
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 in a sport competition will not be attainable if a
player
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 has
poor foundation
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a poor foundation
 in life. In conclusion,
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 is not only determined by physical
ability skills
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ability, skills
 but rather to have a good attitude in a
game
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 is
also
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 a factor.Teamwork plays a significant role in attaining
success
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 as they quote
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Two heads are better than
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" and I opine that both skills are important to attain
success
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