Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artist should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A growing number of people are of the opinion that
government
should give monetary aid to entertainers while others have the view that
support
should come from elsewhere. In my own view, I think that funding should come from another route considering the fact that
government
Suggestion
the government
has other more pressing responsibilities to take care of.
To begin
with, those in agreement that governing bodies should give
support
to artists believe that it will help to boost their morale thereby making them to produce better albums without going through financial stress. Proponents of
this
part of
argument
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the argument
also
believe that if
government
takes up the responsibility, it will go a long way in assuring the citizens that they have their interest at heart.
For instance
, the music-manifesto in
England which
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England, which
is fully funded by the
government
has always drawn a lot of young talented
musician
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musicians
from all over the world to participate in the show.
Nonetheless
, artistic
support
can come from any other source
such
as from private companies, non governmental organisations or sometimes the individuals.
This
enables the
government
to focus more on certain needs in the public sectors
such
as provision of basic amenities, trade and industries which I believe is part of their primary function.
For instance
, the Fela's shrine in Lagos which is seen as the landmark of most musical concerts and
artistic
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art
galleries in Nigeria, have most of its exhibitions fully funded by individuals and private organizations. All in all,
although
a number of people hold the view
thar
pointing out something
that
government
should provide monetary
support
to individuals in
entertainment industries
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the entertainment industries
, I think that other needs should
instead
be taken care of. Policy makers should allow the citizens to cater for their own entertainment.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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