While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Both global warming and
deforestation
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are serious problems, but I believe
deforestation
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is more dangerous right now because it destroys nature faster and affects
people
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directly. Global warming is a big threat
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the future, but cutting down
forests
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hurts the environment and communities today.
First,
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deforestation
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kills wildlife and damages land immediately. When
trees
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are cut down, animals lose their homes and many species disappear forever.
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, orangutans in Indonesia are dying because their
forests
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are being destroyed for palm oil farms.
Trees
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protect soil from washing away. Without them,
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fields turn to dust, and floods become worse. In some
country
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,
people
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cut down too many
trees
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, and now the land cannot grow enough food. These problems happen right now, not in 50 years.
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stopping
deforestation
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is easier than fixing global warming. To fight climate change, all countries must work together, but
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is very difficult. Rich countries and poor countries argue about who should do more.
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, one country alone can protect its
forests
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. Brazil,
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, reduced Amazon
deforestation
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by 80% in 10 years when the government enforced strict rules. If every country protected its
trees
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, it would
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help against global warming because
forests
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absorb carbon dioxide. Some
people
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say global warming is worse because it affects the whole planet. They aren't wrong rising temperatures cause dangerous storms and melting ice. But we cannot wait.
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politicians talk about climate change,
forests
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keep disappearing every minute. Protecting
trees
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gives us clean air,
fresh water
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, and stable weather right away. In conclusion,
deforestation
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is the more urgent problem. It destroys nature faster, hurts
people
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now, and can be stopped with strong local laws. We must save
forests
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first,
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because without them, fighting global warming will be even harder.

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You have a clear opinion and support it well throughout your essay.
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Your introduction and conclusion are both strong and clearly show your stance on the topic.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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