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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
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The supplied pie charts depict the shifts in annual expenditure by a certain UK
school
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 three different times, 981, 1991, and 2001. In general, teachers’ salaries were the highest proportion of annual spending
percentage
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.
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, insurance was consistent as the lowest
percentage
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 of annual
school
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 spending over the times observed. Looking at the details, in 1981
teacher’s
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teachers’
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 salaries accounted
nearly
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a
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half, 40% of total
school
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 costs and increased significantly in 1991 which accounted
exactly
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a
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half, 50% and remained the highest spending in 2001 as well, 45%. Meanwhile, other
worker’s
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workers’
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 salaries, references, and furniture and tool fluctuated and amassed
big
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percentage
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 of
school
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 disbursement
all together
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, it was about 40%
in
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 average.
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, insurance was the lowest
percentage
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 of total
school
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 spending
overall
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 observed years. It was only 2% of total spending in 1981 and remained the tiniest fraction
subsequently
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 in 1991 and 2001, 3% and 8% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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