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Many youngsters do unpaid work to help their local community,which benefits both themselves and society.Some people believe that all teenagers should thus be required to do unpaid work in their free time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Technology has advanced from hand blenders to food processors, manual washing to automatic machines, and these new appliances have made people’s life more comfortable as compared to the past. It is almost unimaginable one modern household functions without modern household appliances.
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 rapid development has lessened the burden for many and proved beneficial;
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, it has posses’ drawbacks to mankind and the environment which cannot be ignored.
Body paragraph 1
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, let’s discuss the positive aspects. In
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 modern era, where everybody is occupied, especially the working ladies, with the new inventions people do not have much trouble in doing house chores. The time is spent in doing household work has reduced remarkably. In
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 way, people can save a lot of them, which is the most valuable asset in the modern society.
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 to
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, it has helped those who are not skilled in cooking, washing, cleaning and other house activities. As these consumer goods are self-explanatory and automatic most of the time,
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, anyone with basic knowledge of the language can cook or wash by following simple manual in just couples of minutes.
Body paragraph 2
To conclude, modern appliances are invented to make people’s life easier and they are successful in that,
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, the cost environment has to bear
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 its benefits.
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, everyone should use energy efficient appliances, and that will still make the life of people easier and more convenient yet eco-friendly.
Conclusion
To sum up, even though people are more reliable on machines now and are having health related problems, people have gained more from machines in terms of saving time and doing struggle sharply.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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