Nowadays, entertainers get paid more than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive development?

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In recent years, a lot has changed regarding the salaries.

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politicians are responsible for running the

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, nowadays, entertainers get paid more handsomely than politicians.

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change has both negatives and positives,

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believe that the negatives outweigh the merits.

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, politicians have to work more than the average citizen of a

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. They are

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responsible for not just the well being of

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the country

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the wellbeing of citizens. Presidents, prime ministers, cabinet ministers and other members of legislative assembly have numerous roles, and most of these people receive continuous threats from citizens who are unhappy with their decisions. It's important to understand that a single decision can not help everyone, there will always be 5% - 10% people who will oppose the decision. It is remarkable that even after threats to their lives, they continue to work for the people and make sure that citizens stay happy.

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, the countries' development too is dependent on the politicians and not the entertainers. Most of the decisions regarding the excise duties, electronics, transportation and even energy sector are always made by politicians, and they are made keeping interests of people in mind.

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, in India, politicians have taken up the initiative to become free from obscene content available on the internet, they have

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taken an initiative to bring in electric vehicles and have reduced excise duty massively.

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, there are some benefits for increased pay for the entertainment industry. Politicians do a good job at developing the

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, but they certainly do not help people to stay entertained or happy.

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is why the entertainers in recent years have gained immense appraise and people now prefer to be entertained rather than be made aware about different trade policies. Due to the increased demand for entertainers, it is natural for the industry to grow and the entertainers to earn more.

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, it is a good thing to keep the nation safe, but it is equally important for the people to have freedom and have the right to enjoy. In conclusion,

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the entertainers are helping people laugh and enjoy their time, it's wrong to keep the pay fixed for politicians and increase the pay given to entertainers.

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, the pay of both politicians and entertainers must be increased in similar proportion to ensure that the citizens are enjoying and at the same time the nation is growing.

Paritosh SinghFri Jul 31 2020

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Nowadays, entertainers get paid more than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is this a negative or positive development?

Fully explain your ideas

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A person's worth seems to be judged by appearance and social status more than by traditional values of kindness, trust, and honor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people believe that governments should invest tax-payer's money in healthcare, other believe that money should be used in other areas. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion

Some people think that planning for the future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?