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Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language. Do you agree with opinion?

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There is an opinion that in order to understand a
country
‘s
culture
,
one
 must be proficient in the language of that
country
 and have spent years in that
country
. I agree with
this
 viewpoint,
however
, I understand that there are other factors that influences
one
‘s understanding towards certain civilization.
To begin
 with, every part of the
country
 has its own dialect. Needless to say that different languages influence the difference among cultures.
Consequently
,
one
 cannot fully communicate with the locals in they are not fully aware of the speech.
For instance
, northern ethnic groups have several synonyms for snow, while,
on the other hand
, the southern regions have only
one
 word. So, in order to communicate with your native colleagues or neighbours,
one
 must have proficiency in the speech.
On the contrary
,
culture
 is not just about the language, there is much more to it,
such
 as their traditions and norms. Take an example of the importance of tea in Japanese
culture
, an individual can invite their colleagues to a tea party and
thus
, can implement better understanding and respect towards their
culture
.
Consequently
,
one
 can teach themselves about specific
culture
‘s folk dances and festivals via online research and through the help of guide books. In the end, learning another language could be helpful in better communication, but it still does not fulfil all the requirements, that
one
 need to have greater understanding of
one
‘s rituals and traditions.
Thus
, having good communication skills and traditions known,
one
 can flourish in a particular
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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