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some people say that museums should be free but others opine that some entry fee should be there. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by a certain populace that there should be an
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 fee for the museums, while others disagree.
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 fees might discourage people, I believe that it would financially support the functioning of the
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 with,
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 fees for the
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 will discourage people.
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, people may love to spend their money on entertainment purposes, or they may not have the fee to pay.
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, according to a survey by a well-known newspaper The Guardian, it is found that only 10% of the people are only interested in the paid visit to the
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, the purpose of the
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, to teach people about local culture and history, cannot be accomplished. Having said that, I believe that
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 fees will be supporting the
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 financially.
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 is to say, there are various expenses of the
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,
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 as the salary of the staff, and the preservation and procurement of new artefacts.
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, the museums most often are funded by the government bodies, and any delay in the payment by the government creates chaos as employees do not get their salaries on time.
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 can be exemplified by 60% of curators in the UK, who admitted that they most often do not get their salary on time.
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, funding in the form of the
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 fees will help to pay monthly bills and all other expenditures. In conclusion, some people believe that the
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 fees will deter visitors, while I argue that it will help to smooth the functioning of the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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