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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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The contemporary generation reckons the idea of having offsprings at a later
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, the advantage of getting more time for career progression clearly outweighs the disadvantage of pregnancy complications at an older
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. A decade back couples used to become parents in their mid 20s, but nowadays people prefer not to take responsibilities at an early
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 belief comes with a major disadvantage of having complicated deliveries and inborn diseases in children.
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, the survey conducted by Parenting health forum, NY, revealed the statistics that 78% of couples who got pregnant after 35 faced complications in conceiving as well as delivering a baby.
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, 5 couples admitted the fact that their child is suffering from down syndrome due to pregnancy complications. Today young couples are not making babies until 5-10 years of marriage. The underlying advantage is that they get a substantial time to grow into careers as a team. Which gives them social recognition and a great lifestyle.
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, London institute of health carried a survey of couples getting pregnant in their 20s and another who got pregnant in the 30s. The data showed that parents in
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 group of 20-30 are more anxious about future and responsibilities as compared to above 30s who are ready to handle it with maturity.
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 comes from the well planned couples as they attain a good career platform by
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 time and plans the baby's future with better resources. In conclusion, becoming parents at an early
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 can be healthy for a lady,
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 a baby at a later
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 helps with parenting the child with maturity and greater resources.
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