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In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Industries are expanding rapidly into different demographic regions due to extensive globalization and urbanization. Despite the fact that it is showing an impact in day-to-day life. I firmly believe, the trend is not detrimental. Launching
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 multinational companies create many local opportunities which
contributes
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contribute
 to
job bank
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the job bank
job banks
. Starting from: building infrastructure, formation of
executive board
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the executive board
.
information
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Information
 technology providers.
supporting
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Supporting
 desk staff, maintenance personnel to
finally
paying
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pay
 back taxes to local government. All these add up to state’s or province’s economy.
For example
, San Francisco-based IT firm Salesforce company has recently launched its branches in India.
Thus
, creating new job roles to local people and encouraging new talent. Their main job description mentioned that they are not looking for either premier Institute candidates or applicants with professional degrees.
This
 new trend attracted everyone and has been followed by other companies too.
World
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The world
 is becoming
small
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smaller
. Many products are being easily accessible from any part of the world. One good example is
,
Accept space
,
Toronto city, which is the heart of Canada. Toronto is multicultural where we can experience world class services ranging from West to East and North to South. People living in and around Toronto doesn't feel that they are lacking their favourite products due to their migration. Famous well-being services like yoga, meditation, massage therapies etc., which are being
centered
a careless leisurely gait
sauntered
entered
 in few regions became available to people all around the world. Who share common interests. In conclusion, progression of international companies and products
into
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in
 various geographic dimensions should be welcomed with
wider perspective
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a wider perspective
. Often,
this
 should be
c;considered
carefully weighed
considered
 as beneficial rather than vicious.
Submitted by Pooja Sindhuri Kantepalli Venkata on

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