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Some people think that planning for the future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent agree/disagree?

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It is believed that it is unnecessary for those who prearrange for their prospect because they think that concentration on the current is more essential. From my perspective, I partly agree with
this
 opinion. On the one hand, it is undeniable that focusing on the present is more crucial than making a plan for the times ahead because of many reasons.
Firstly
, challenges we may encounter in the future is a source of anxiety, which is able to deprive many people’s feelings of pleasure at the moment,
Therefore
, people who pay attention exclusively to the present have an effective strategy to keep themselves contented and delighted rather than feel under pressure.
Secondly
, life is unpredictable since issues may arise out of nowhere, which means caring-outlined plans could end up in trash bins.
Hence
, the philosophy of focusing on the present is of great importance in empowering people to have flexible improvisations and avoid being passive.
On the other hand
, I believe that future planning is a key factor contributing to people’s success in their life. The
first
 reason is that a detailed plan enables people to anticipate upcoming barriers they have to overcome and the requirements they have to fulfil.
This
,
as a result
, provides them with sufficient time to get well-prepared to minimize unexpected consequences as well as seizing potential opportunities and tasting the fruit of success.
Furthermore
, a master plan plays a role as a map and guidance in the long run towards the final goals in order that people do not get distracted and lost during the process.
In other words
, a competent planner is always oriented, and
thus
 with perseverance, his efforts will surely pay off. In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, good preparation for the future maybe never a useless thing.
However
, concentration of targets on the present
also
 plays an equally vital role.
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