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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.

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These days new gadgets, phones or laptops are the most interesting thing for the people to purchase. Every month due to the advancement of technology new versions of the items is introduced in the market. There are some people think that
this
 became adverse affects to one's life, some take it
otherwise
. In my view,
this
 is a fantastic for the people to always be updated, in order to enhance their knowledge and compete in the real world. Recently, we are living in a world where technology gets upgraded very frequently. The people who have latest machinery with them has an edge over the others because they have knowledge about all the latest products in the market.
In addition
, if they have access to the latest gadgets, phones, or laptop they would never face any challenges related to the latest technologies.
For Example
:
Accept space
:
- One of my uncle has given his ward access to all the latest devices since his childhood, he was the
first
 one from his university who got placed with the highest package. The access to all these latest items to enhance the knowledge and skills of the individual which helps in their growth.
On the other hand
, some people think that these gadgets, phones, or laptops bring distraction in our life. These items make an individual so much occupied that sometime he is unable to get out of his virtual world.
In addition
, these technological discoveries have reduced human effort
as a result
, there are no physical activities required to perform things. These kind of addiction can lead one to physical problems to an individual. To conclude, people should buy latest technological items that should help them in their growth and they should define some limits for the usage of these items, so that they should not get addicted to these and spoil their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • status symbol
  • financial burden
  • obsession
  • impulsive
  • consumerism
  • sustainability
  • e-waste
  • environmentally friendly
  • second-hand market
  • repairability
  • upgradability
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