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Band 7

Your town council has decided to demolish an historic building due to lack of funds to renovate. Write a letter to your counselor . In your letter, you should say: why it is important to preserve the historic building how the funds could be generated.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter [to express my opinion on your recent decision, to demolish the central building
due to
 insufficient funds.
Although
 the town council has followed all options to raise money for building reconstruction, all attempts did not succeed. I believe that demolishing would not be prudent for society. The central building holds our cultural values, and sculpture, painting and building layouts depict the ancestor's life.
Therefore
, it is a valuable source of information for local youngsters.
Apart from
this
, being a tourist attraction, I would be a considerable source of income for the local council. There are numerous ways to generate funds for the building.
Firstly
, I would suggest online fundraising, people will become aware of building conditions.
Consequently
, awareness would lead to donations.
Secondly
, the council could organise an art competition every month, which can help to add funds. I hope you will consider these ways before demolishing historic buildings. Thank You for hearing me out. Best Regards, Parm
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suitable writing tone
Ensure all language is formal and consistent. Consider replacing phrases like 'people will become aware of building conditions' with more formal alternatives like 'the community will be made aware of the building’s current condition.'
single idea per paragraph
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea and ensure smooth transitions between ideas to improve coherence. This makes it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
complete response
Your letter addresses both prompts clearly: explaining the importance of the historic building and suggesting ways to generate funds.
logical structure
The letter is structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which helps guide the reader through your points effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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