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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Due to fast internet, we are habituated to
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 the
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 day-by-day. Our children sit longer
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 in front of the laptop and trying to finish their homework and learn new things over there. There are many negatives to
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 long
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 for
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 high definition screen, But, we have many advantages to
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 the
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 new change in upcoming generation will give lots of advantages in future. Computers are a really good device for younger's, they are learning many things from it. Recently the giant IT firm "Google", started the new way of coding for children, and they are excited to attend those classes. We have many examples where
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 magical device, keeping their presence and creating the necessity in education and business. We could not turn away and avoid to
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 of that kind of instruments from our life, those needed for our children to compete in the world.
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, exes
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 may harm our children's health, We must educate them to do the important work on it and get
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 for other activities, like paying outdoor games. Children are playing video games on it at their free
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, we can promote them to play the games on the ground; which is
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 important for their fitness and mental health. We can
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 some device like anti glare glasses on
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computer screen
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a computer screen
the computer screen
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 so their eyes may get relief. In conclusion, We can not stop total
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computers
the computer
a computer
 because of their negligence side effect, Even we have to try to find the solution to
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 and how to keep a healthy body. In the future, maybe we can experience some side effect, but as of now it is required for children's educations and competitions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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