It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both ideas by giving your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
general people
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general, people
claimed that talent is
most important thing
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the most important thing
when someone learn a new thing in life
for
example playing
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example, playing
a new instrument, singing or playing a
game but
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game, but
others believed that everything can be learned if you want to be good in your area. Two
perspective
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perspectives
are really important because someone can be born with valuable talent and they tend to do facilities like music and sport easily but it is not unfeasible doing without any ability.
On the other hand
people who do not have any skills can do
this activities
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these activities
this activity
, they can be taught I agree with people who say learning is possible in all
conditions providing
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conditions, providing
that
people
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person
willing to be success whatever they want.
For
instance one
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instance, one
of my
friend
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friends
did not tend to play
violin but
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violin, but
she set her mind on doing it and she studied a lot, went same courses and received private tuition for
this
. It took two
years but
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years, but
she did.
This
phanemonea
any state or process known through the senses rather than by intuition or reasoning
phenomena
broke taboos in my mind after that I believe everyone can do everything what they want.
Finally
, nothing can be obstacle on desire and tenacity even though being talentless
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