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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Environmental issues are ubiquitous these days. Many believe that
loss
 of
species
 of fauna and flora is mainly due to these environmental problems and others argue that there are more issues to tackle with. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both sides of the arguments and explain my support for the latter.  
Firstly
, people who consider that the
loss
 of plants and animal varieties is the main issue, may argue that the governments are focusing on preserving them because they believe that there is an imminent danger. Due to
this
, they are setting up conservatories for preserving
species
 more than ever.
For instance
, the Indian government has set up a national conservatory for Bengal tigers and fresh water dolphins. The argument goes that if there is a need for conservation,
then
 the
loss
 of these
species
 is high.  
However
, I believe that there are more issues to worry about the environment. The global warming is a main concern.
This
 is because the sea levels are rising, and the global temperature is getting higher as well. The research shows that the hurricanes and draughts are getting stronger than ever.
As a result
, every living being is getting impacted and
loss
 of plants or animals is just one of the outcomes. If we focus on resolving the global warming, we should
also
 be able to preserve all and any living beings.   To recapitulate,
although
loss
 of
species
 is one of the environmental concerns that we see today, I feel that we should see the bigger picture and resolve global warming.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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