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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Iconic peoples are always in the limelight and everyone curious to know their lives. Many times they are in hot topic about their private life and media following them regarding the controversy. I think they are human being and others needs to give freedom to execute their personal life without interruption. Some time, maybe it unjustifiable because they would like to create dispute to stay on focus in the news. Everyone has rights to privacy, no matter how much he have fame in public. Middle class families wanted to become themselves like a celebrity and always interesting to follow them and the media put the focus on it. In recent news, one famous film start went for vacation with his family and channel news trying to cover their holiday in news.
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 the end he peruses to the reporter, he wanted to spend some good time with his family and it's not good to cover in the news. Sometimes they like to participate in controversial news to stay in the limelight and intentionally ride on unethical way. But, it will not apply to all famous peoples. To stay tuned on TV news or newspaper headline may have lots of other ways and more stable if they are choosing correct way and give learning to others. . In conclusion, considered as a human we all need give the room to live their private life as per their choices and whenever they are comfortable come-up themselves to share their experience which are valuable for all of us.
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