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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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In the recent years, the rate of
abortion
 is gradually increasing.
However
, some people argue that, some action should be taken against it,
where as
on the other hand
whereas
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 have an opinion that, it should be made legal. In my opinion, an intermediate way should be created.
To begin
 with,
rate
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the rate
 of
abortion
 is increasing over the years as that
freedom
 is given to the people. Due to which, parents can plan their
child
 and can provide better social and financial life
to
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for
there
of them or themselves
their
next
 generation.
For instance
, if a lady becomes pregnant at a certain stage of her life in which she do not want to give birth to a
child
, maybe because of the career goals, financial goals or many more,
then
 she should be the person who decides
to do
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to do with abortion
abortion
 or not.
Therefore
, we can say that,
abortion
 can
given
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give
 legal status as it helps families to plan better conditions to
there
of them or themselves
their
child
.
On the other hand
, In many societies,
abortion
is consider
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is considered
 as a serious crime. The reason for
that is
, people consider it as
killing
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the killing
 of the life and
that is
 a serious crime.
For example
, In India,
abortion
 is not allowed as people consider it as a gift of the god and doing
abortion
 is not
preffered
more desirable than another
preferred
prepared
, as it is not accepted by the society.
Hence
,
this
 is the reason why people are against the
abortion
. In my opinion, I think people should have
freedom
 to do
abortion
 till the
third
 month of the
pregnency
the state of being pregnant; the period from conception to birth when a woman carries a developing fetus in her uterus
pregnancy
, as
child
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the child
a child
 is not developed completely, and by implementing
this
 rule, people will have
freedom
 to decide as well as, the practice of infant killing will not be encouraged. In conclusion, the
freedom
 to do
abortion
 or not should be
decide
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decided
 by the
parents but
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parents, but
 a law should be implemented by which the
abortion
 is not encouraged in the society.
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