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All high school students should be encouraged to take part in community service programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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People hold different views about whether or not students should participate in
community
 service programmes. Though taking part in
such
 activities has been criticized, I still agree that students' involvement in serving their
community
 can be a good idea. There are several reasons why students' engagement in
community
 services can be seen as a worrying development. A major fear is that it could remove focus from their education and bring them some sort of distraction. Another concern is that it could negatively affect employment opportunities by moving tasks from paid job to voluntary work. Despite the above critics, I think that encouraging students to do unpaid work
to
Suggestion
in
 their
community
 could bear several advantages. The main benefit is that it helps the young people to build their sense of personal responsibility toward their communities, and to learn how to play constructive roles in their societies. Doing activities
such
 as cleaning public parks or roadsides, assisting the local fire or police service, and helping the elderly in nursing homes will teach the youth to make efforts in order to serve the common good by improving the life for all citizens.
In addition
, students can
also
 learn to identify and address issues of public concern All in all, despite the fears that could be raised about students' inclusion in
community
 programmes, it seems that
such
 kind of acts brings overwhelming advantages both to the individual himself and to his/her
community
.
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