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Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while others think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is a genial conflict of believing between two groups of people. While one group of people believes wireless is the best way to improve our
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 about world, country or city, whereas another group of people believe
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 set is the best source in order to improve our
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 about the world or a state/city. In my opinion
television
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 set is the best source for improving once
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. In the ancient time when people didn't have
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 sets, they were completely dependent on wireless in order to derive information about their surroundings. Listing of wireless often leads to missed communication. In order to over
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 issue, as the technology started to improve, discovery of
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 set came into the picture. These
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 set sets were considered to be a luxury that time and was mostly found in households of upper class making them rarer. As the time pass by
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 sets became important, as
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 lead to the development of a new industry known as the film industry, as people like to see what they are listing to. Similar is the case with a group of people who gather information by the medium of
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 set sets as
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 allow them to see what they are listing to while
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 isn't possible with wireless. I would even prefer to gather my
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 by
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 sets as
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 leads to better understanding of the
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 given by the reporter. As a person could learn by visual image rather than just listen to it.
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