Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people opine that entertainers are paid heavily and they have a negative influence on
society
while others dissent that they have a constructive influence on society
and deserve the money
. However
, I agree with the latter view and believe that they should be paid more money
compare to other professions.
Most of the entertainers earned a lot from endorsing apart from their main profession and as a result
, they have a lavish lifestyle
and millions of people follow them. However people
try to imitate their Accept comma addition
However, people
lifestyle
and lose their focus on their life goals and career path. For instance
, a recent survey published by the Times magazine shows a majority of the youths in India try to copy the lifestyle
of their favourite celebrities like their brands, vacation. As a result
of this
, most of the people lose their hard earned money
by just following the celebrity lifestyle
.
However
, I agree that the entertainers should be paid more money
as they are one who influences the society
. They have to work hard to achieve the position and compromise on their diets to maintain their look and appearance. Nevertheless
, they also
encourage many people to work towards their life goals. For instance
, many celebrities are nowadays are doing many charities and social awareness programs to help the society
like funding the cancer aids, educational programs and many more. As a result
of this
million of people are getting aware of the society
issues and helping the Suggestion
societal
society
by donating money
.
To conclude, in my opinion, both the sides have their pros and cons. Entertainers are one of the most significant part of the society
and have more positive aspects than the negative. However people
should not copy everything from their celebrity's life.Accept comma addition
However, people
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