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People say it is the responsibility of the residents to keep the environment clean and tidy while others think it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The population believe that keeping the environment clean is the citizens' responsibility meanwhile the other group assume it is the government's duty to preserve nature in a healthy state. I think both of these groups have their own share in
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 problem.
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 with, people have a significant impact on the natural surroundings,
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 as coastal
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 and national parks. They use these facilities on their vacations and their free time and it is essential to preserve these
areas
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 if the citizens do not consider their part and throw their waste and useless stuff in those
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, gradually they will be full of garbage and the government is not able to clean them.
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 , they need to be informed about their bad habits and
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 try their best to make public education and prevent those who do not obey rules.
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, if the crowd always go to the beach and produces a huge amount of waste and
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 them in those remote
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 who is able to tackle it and collect all the waste that
placed
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 in remote
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?
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, the authorities have their own duty and they can introduce a community for cleaning the natural
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,
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 as jungles and parks. The new community could be able to make those nations clean and cease the expanding wasteful habitats.
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, after a period we can have cleaner and healthier
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, so we can live our lives in high-quality communities.
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, some modern countries entitled some groups to tidy remote
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 and those distant
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 have been cleaned and they have fantastic sceneries. In conclusion, the population and the government have to act simultaneously to make our natural
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 clean, in my opinion, they can introduce some rules and some communities to preserve habitats,
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, the citizens have to consider their parts and obey rules.

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Grammar
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Vocabulary
Using a wider range of sentence structures and more sophisticated vocabulary can enhance your overall score by making your essay sound more professional.
Content
In discussions, ensure to explore both views more evenly to demonstrate a balanced analysis.
Examples
Clarification and development of points using examples are good, but try to include more specific, detailed examples to further support each argument.
Structure
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Task Response
Your essay effectively addresses the topic and provides a final opinion, fulfilling the task requirements.
Coherence
You have used linking words effectively to connect your ideas, which helps in making your argument coherent.
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