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some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvanatages of a family run business

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In today's world, tremendous businesses are run by a family. Some believe that
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 is the most effective way to control a party.
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 essay will elaborate on the benefits and drawbacks of managing the group by a member of the family.
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, the advantages of family owned business, is that trust and honesty is strongly and inherently established. So strength and weakness between each member of family are well known and can be used appropriately in any circumstances.
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, sales, execution, and leadership can be assigned to the member who excel in those areas.
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. It is few chances that discrimination can be occurred among them.
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, they can invest their opportunities,
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 as expanding territories of facilities or growth within sales income.
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, salaries, bonus, and profit sharing would sharply increase because it is given to the limited members.
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, there are some minors exist among the family.
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 with, no distinction between the family during their family time because they have to stay most of time at the same place. It might lead them to destruction of the family.
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, due to differences between a financial state, they might bring an issue among them.
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, a decision making or dividing the profits or salaries between the representative of the family might not agree upon by the all representative. To conclude, there are a lot of merits and demerits about running the association
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, the merits can overcome the demerits and could be used to develop the corporation. In future,
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 will encourage the
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