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Education is very important. How can children who are disinterested in study be motivated to learn? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Education plays an essential role in human's life. In the modern era, Many students are not interested in their study. In
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 with, it is an irrefutable fact that without the good education, we cannot survive in
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 world, but to motivate the disinterested teenagers schools should make a different timetable for that student. To cite an example, Sometimes a youngster cannot understand the importance of education, So to realize the value of studies schools has to use playway method. They can teach their children with different types of educational games like, quizzes and puzzles.
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, School have to add some outdoor game on their timetable to overcome the stress level from children's minds
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, In many schools some children have very high interest in games and they are not good at their studies. I think parents can help in
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 situation as compared to any other person because they know their child more than anyone.
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, Parents should make rule at home, Which they can divide study and play time.
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, The university of Toronto did a great research and found that 50% of teenagers spend their leisure times to play different types of online games, So parents and schools has to create some online studies game. Which can help to encourage children for studies. To summarize, I pen down and say that it is the responsibility of both parents and schools to know the interest of their kids because some time children want to do some things different
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 their current education.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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