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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Usually, young students after completion of their higher studies, they want to do the job or go for a trip in a
year
 gap before starting university.
This
 essay will elaborate the advantages and disadvantage of
this
 trend. Students who decided to take a
year
 vocations before taking admission in the universities have many positive sides. Those youngsters who got opportunity to have some practical exposure at a young age may have clearer vision about their career.
For example
, if a student got an internship in a business firm, he may get the idea about the field of his interest. So it will be easy for him to decide about his choice of subjects for
further
 studies.
However
, travelling is
also
 an option to spend leaves and have a healthy break from studies. During travelling, people may encounter different challenges which enhance their personal skills.
Further
, they will get exposure to various cultures which make them more confident and social. On the other side, there are some drawbacks to take a long gap between studies. Children may lose their interest in
further
 learnings. They may feel difficulties to rejoin their studies.
For instance
, a student may take long leaves and start doing a job and earn good amount of salary, but after a
year
 he can quit his studies and continue to work. In my opinion, students should have a
year
 break before taking admission in universities and get exposure around the world.
This
 can make them independent and more practical.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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