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Some people say that the Internet is responsible for destroying the social skills of teenagers and young adults. Why do you think the Internet is seen as dangerous in this way and what can we do to ensure that it does not harm the social development of teenagers and young adults?

#people #internet #skills #teenagers #adults #harm #development
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Over the
last
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 decade, the use of the Internet by the
youth
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 has increased alarmingly. I believe that
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 has worsened their communicating abilities severely, but that through limiting screen
time
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 and encouraging in-person
time
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 with friends and family members, communicating abilities can be restored. The internet is damaging the social skills of
youth
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 in many ways. In the
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 place, it isolates them excessively, as being online is a dramatically lonely activity.
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, they often spend all day long playing
videogames
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video games
 and posting pictures on social media
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 of going out with friends.
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, some of them have lost their non-verbal communication skills.
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As
 they are writing and receiving short texts or calls
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
 active discussions, active listening and empathy ARE not as important.
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 may hinder their ability to understand and react appropriately to body language and tone of voice. There are some measures to be applied in order to ensure proper social development in teenagers and young adults. The
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 one is that the
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 spent online should be limited, namely, they could have an internet-free day or actual scheduled
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 to surf the web. Another solution is to increase their social activities. They could join a sports club or work for community services in the neighbourhood. In
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 manner, they would have to talk to others and articulate ideas, and
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, improve their speaking and social skills. The internet, in my opinion, is certainly isolating the
youth
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 and worsening their language. In spite of that, there are some solutions to
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 as reducing their
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 online and increasing their social activities. Nobody is untouched by the effects of the internet so definitely we should all be mindful and try to prevent it from harming our
youth
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 social skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Isolation
  • Face-to-face interactions
  • Cyberbullying
  • Anonymity
  • Harassment
  • Social media
  • Superficial relationships
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Communication skills
  • Virtual validation
  • Self-esteem
  • Online communities
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital literacy
  • Awareness programs
  • Constructive use
  • Setting boundaries
  • Social development
  • Meaningful connections
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