IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8.5

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary work. In your letter •Explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum. •Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful. •Gives details of when you would be available for work.

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Dear
Museum
 Director, I am writing you
this
 letter to express my interest in working as a volunteer at the Louver
Museum
 in Abu Dhabi city, as I noticed that you are looking for a volunteer to guide tourists during the night shift. Currently, I am working as a history teacher at Al Najah School which is very close to the
museum
 location and I will be very excited to join the
museum
 after school. With my background and personal skills, I believe that I can easily fulfil that position.
Furthermore
, I have attended many trainings about communication and IT skills which are definitely will add value to my work at the
museum
. If my request is accepted, I am ready to join your team by the 15th of May 2024 or available to discuss and agree on any alternative schedule if my proposal doesn’t suit your plan. Looking forward to hearing a positive response in
this
 regard, Yours sincerely,
Submitted by maowda1982 on

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coherence cohesion
Continue to maintain a logical structure in your writing, ensuring that each paragraph serves a distinct purpose, as this greatly enhances readability.
task achievement
Your letter excellently meets the task requirements; maintaining a focus on why you are interested, how your skills align, and your availability demonstrates task achievement.
task achievement
To further improve, consider giving more specific examples of how your skills and training would apply to the volunteering position.
overall
Although your letter is well-composed, double-check for minor typographical errors to ensure clarity and professionalism.
positive
You've effectively communicated your enthusiasm and relevant experiences, which makes your application compelling.
positive
The structure of your letter is clear and logical, making your arguments and statements easy to follow.
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