Some people think art such as sculpture and music cannot improve the quality of people’s lives so the government should not spend money on them but on health and defence. What is your opinion?

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Some people believe that the

government

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should allocate

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amounts paid for goods and services that may be currently tax deductible (as opposed to capital expenditures)

expenses

experience

health

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care

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and the

health

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prevention and no longer to spend money on

art

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and

music

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, because they think these things can not

optumize

make optimal; get the most out of; use best

optimize

optimise

our quality life. In

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essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and give my own point of view. In the wake of

aging population

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an aging population

and low birth rates, many countries are experiencing their

health

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care

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issue.

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, many

patient

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patients

are waiting

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wait

have been waiting

the medical service for a long time, especially some

patient

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patients

need to wait a year above for a specialist.

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government

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the government

should allocate more expenditure in the public

health

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can improve the

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care

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facilities and to increase the number of medical

professional

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professionals

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, the

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prevention is

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important,

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can make people

more healthy

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healthier

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government

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the government

should promote some video for

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care

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information and make

more educational advertisement

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a more educational advertisement

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as to encourage people do sports or having nutritious diets.

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can help to decrease the pressure of the medical system. On the other hands,

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and

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are

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important for our quality life. Listening to

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and enjoy to draw a picture can improve our

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involving the mind or an intellectual process

mental

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. The best example is you can

listening

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listen

to some relaxing

music

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to make yourself clam, happy and become less stiff.

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can edify our mind.

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, some artist

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goes

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gallary

spectators at a golf or tennis match

galleries

to gain inspiration to refresh their mind. When they can get some of the sudden good idea, it may activate their creation.

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means we can enjoy something new in

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music

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. In conclusion,

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and

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can release our stress and inspire our mind.

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, I strongly believe that the

health

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care

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issue is the biggest problem and it has been causing a significant pressure on our medical system,

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this

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issue should be a priority to

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act on verbally or in some form of artistic expression

deal

with by

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make up the large expenses of the proportion.

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Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people think art such as sculpture and music cannot improve the quality of people’s lives so the government should not spend money on them but on health and defence. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

The internet has changed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems the did not exist before. What are the problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.

Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?