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Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?

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Preference for students'
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 management tends to choose restricted. It spreads widely as a typical timetable in school. It is agreed that the institute timeline should be monitored.
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 will be proved from the view of the immature behaviour of children and a growing punctuality mind.
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, the limited calendar plays an essential role in making institute kids focus on subjects.
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, owing to a proper break
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, kids can concentrate on assignments.
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, a study conducted by Japanese scientist revealed that an adequate break can make a brain active, intense, and concentration will increase to some extent,
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, people who didn't get certain
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 of the break, cannot stay in put on the subjects.
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secondly
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, in
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 modern society, it is prioritized that delivering or handing in some r or assignments to one another on
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.
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, in Japan, in any of authorities make employees to complete tasks at present.
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, if the employee delayed for delivery an item to a customer, they may get a complaint from them because of the delay.
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, kids should be taught a quality of being on
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 by the institution.
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, the controlled timetable should be set to establish punctuality for academy kids.  To conclude, the traditional timetable has a function that teaching how important of punctuality.
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, it is clear that deciding kids
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 agenda themselves cannot be supported, from the points of views that causing the bad behaviour and improving the quality of being on
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. Because of
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, kids should be monitored within restricted schedule.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time management
  • self-discipline
  • personal responsibility
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • peak productivity periods
  • real-world demands
  • effective time management
  • controlled environment
  • learning preferences
  • academic performance
  • potential drawbacks
  • misuse
  • procrastinate
  • frameworks and support
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