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Some people believe that to give opportunities to the new generation companies should encourage high level employees who are older than 55 to retire. Do you agree or disagree?

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For the encouragement and development of the current generation in various fields, the companies must give the opportunities to them by retiring their older and experienced employees as per the opinion of a few people. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 statement and will elaborate my decision in the below paragraph.
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 with, It is right that the present generation has a right to get the best jobs related to their fields, but not by replacing the experienced employees. Especially, when they have the capability to do the work. There is no doubt that a new era of people is more intelligent and capable of handling the current technology. They have exceptional and different ideas. But
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 to
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, the older and experienced employees
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 have a lot of experience in their field to which the new one cannot compare with them. As, the experience does matter a lot nowadays as well. They must have aware of the company pros and cons. Even company
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also feel
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also feels
 comfortable and secure with their older employees. To continue with, I can understand that some of the older employees are not comfortable with the new technologies as the freshers. So in that case the higher level employee can promoted to the management level in order to manage the freshers. As they do not have the management experience as of older employees. But if the older employee is still not capable of doing the management job,
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 the company can think of replacement with the newer one. To conclude with, Companies should give opportunities to freshers but not by retiring the capable older employee. They must find the complete hierarchy to give stability to each and everyone.
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