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Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent agree/disagree?

Opinions differ when it comes to people should make plans for the
future
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 or pay attention to the present. While focusing on the present has several benefits, I believe that people should better set a goal for the
future
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. Admittedly, concentrating on the present is necessary for people's lives. The core argument for
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 is that focusing on the present helps individuals make pragmatic
decisionsin
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decisions in
 people’s lives. As life is unpredictable, things do not always come their way. Taking notice of what exists now helps people find the best solution
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 practical for certain situations.
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, if people ignore the present, they tend to have unrealistic ideas and run the risk of failure. Despite the valid argument above, I believe that setting clear goals is more important because of its greater benefits. The key explanation is that
planing
an act of formulating a program for a definite course of action
planning
 for the
future
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 brings a source of motivation to people. Setting a goal helps people define what exactly they want to do or what kind of person they want to be.
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, they tend to exert themselves to their goal and try to overcome difficulties that may arise.
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, Bill Gates, a famous billionaire in the US, he made up his mind to build a top software company over the world in his 20s. In his career path, he faced many
adversities but
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adversities, but
 he never gave up and still learn from mistakes. With these efforts, Bill Gates has succeeded and inspired many people by his story. In conclusion, I firmly hold
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 view that planning for the
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 is more important for people
to achieve
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achieve
 success.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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