During the 20th century, contact between different parts from the world has developed rapidly thanks to air travel and telecommunication. To what extent do you agree that societies benefit from the increased contact and closer relationships with foreigners brought by international tourism and business?

In the 20th century, a closer link has been created among different parts of the
world
thanks to the revolutionary affordability of air travel and ground-shaking development of telecommunication. I strongly agree that societies only benefit from enhanced relationships among people from different countries, enabled by international tourism and business. Societies benefit from a better connected
world
in many ways.
Firstly
, the digital revolution and more affordable air travel led to a faster flow of products and services
transnationally
, which creates an enabling environment for business to thrive. That
countries
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country
are performing
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is performing
better business-wise helps consolidate the
world
stability as it helps improve a nation’s economic independence.
Secondly
, the trend gives every individual a better opportunity to travel overseas and experience new cultures.
For example
, budget airlines made international travels more affordable for young people; seeing the
world
firsthand, the young will learn precious lessons which cannot be taught.
Thirdly
, individuals can use new services and products which are freshly launched a thousand miles away within just a few days;
for example
, iPhone fans in Vietnam can have its latest model only several days after its launch in the US.
Last
but not least, the flattening/the flattening of the
world
means poorer countries can learn best practices from developed countries to shorten their journey to prosperity. As an exemplar for
this
, Singapore has become a highly developed country after
few decades
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a few decades
by seizing its opportunities to build links with the developed
world
. In conclusion,
although
globalisation brought about a number of formidable challenges, I believe creating an environment which enables an enhanced contact with international partners is the key to success for any nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Economic stimulus
  • Diplomatic rapport
  • Globalization
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Multiculturalism
  • Innovation
  • Infrastructure development
  • Cross-cultural communication
  • International trade
  • Eco-tourism
  • Cultural heritage
  • Foreign investment
  • Exchange of expertise
  • Global village
  • Cultural diversity
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