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You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you. Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there describe what you saw offer to take your friend there

#place #impact #friend #offer
Dear Anna, I hope you're doing splendidly! old chum! I'm missing you from the bottom of my heart, it's been so long since we
last
 catch-up so, I thought I'd let the ball rolling with some pleasant tiding. I've dope news to tell you,
last
 week I visited the Bahamas in Mexico. You see it was my office trip but you'll not believe how amazing that place is, in a nutshell, it's a picture-perfect destination. I went there for 3 days, day 1 was all about meetings, you know that your girl is grinding and chasing goals like crazy, burning that midnight oil, can't complain, right? day 2 was all about fun babe, I went to a lake, did some shopping, burnt my pocket and ate yummy food like a horse. Well, girl, I'd fun like a kid, I was full of beans and on cloud 9. I'm planning to take you next time when you're in my neck of the woods. I know you have a big smile on
you're
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 face already, we gonna make so many memories in cosy cafes, dancing and vibing bro!! Can't wait to plan
this
, catch me on the flip side! With love, Diha.
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your paragraphs such that each paragraph focuses on a single idea. This can improve clarity.
task achievement
Ensure that you clearly explain how you traveled to the destination as part of the task requirement.
task achievement
The letter maintains a friendly and engaging tone throughout, which is very suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well done, conveying a sense of warmth and camaraderie.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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