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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, the issues which are related to population always draw the authority of all countries in the world attention and concern. Nowadays, there are different points of view about some countries that have
large
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a large number
number
 of young adults compared with some countries having the
number
 of older people.
This
 essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of
this
 matter. It is undeniable that a
country
 with
large
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a large number
large numbers
number
 of young people would benefit from having profuse
workforce
. If a majority of
population
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the population
 who are young and strong are used wisely, they will have
maximus
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Maximus
 working productivity and help their
country
 create giant assets, bring wealthiness as well as raise gross domestic product significantly. Vietnam is a
country
 which acknowledges literal advantages from having
young
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a young workforce
workforce
 to the economics in recent years, with manually positive financial reports in exporting and
argiculture
a large-scale farming enterprise
agriculture
 recognized by the government.
In addition
, many other countries
also
 show several benefits gained from the so-called phenomenon “the golden population structure”.
However
, there are some disadvantages existed from the young
workforce
 beside these positive
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 mentioned.
Firstly
, the government would have to deal with unemployment if there are not enough jobs available for too many people.
Consequently
, those who are not employed can become the burden of family and society or be likely to commit in some social vices.
Secondly
, the vast growth of youngsters requires the educators to work harder in order to provide
the young age bracket
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a younger age bracket
younger age bracket
the younger age bracket
 with adequate knowledge and skill to become high-quality
workforce
. In my opinion, a
country
 with
relatively large
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a relatively large number
relatively large numbers
the relatively large number
number
 of adults would exert more benefits compared with those which has the older people if the government has suitable policies to manage with possible issues that might occur as noticed above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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