There are social, medical and technology problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What forms do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of the mobile phones?

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Over the past decade, technological devices have played an indispensable essential role in human’ lives. Particularly, using

mobile

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a mobile phone

mobile phones

phone

has become a prevalent and publicly recognized habit.

This

bring

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brings

several downsides in social, medical, technology dilemmas which seem to outweigh

benefits

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the benefits

. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks of utilizing mobile phones. In

term

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terms

of social issues, the public

tend

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tends

to maintain online conversation with their colleagues per day to deploy their work

;

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;

thereby using face-to-face communication seems to be less important.

Consequently

this

may lead to the increasing number of people isolated from direct communication. When it comes to medical problems, it was reported that more and more people have short-sightedness due to excessive use of mobile phones.

Moreover

, utilizing mobile

phone

can

also

cause some technical problems,

for example

individual information stolen. Namely, when someone creates a Facebook account, it is obligatory to fill his name, age and even

phone

number in a form. Sometimes, unfortunately, his account may be hacked by strangers for bad purposes. Due to the reasons

abov

at a higher position than

above

, the evil influence of phones is considerable

On the other hand

, it is indispensable that

mobile

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the mobile phone

phone

has its positive

effects but

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effects, but

personally, cannot overshadow its disadvantages. One of the advantages is

easy contact

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easy, contact

which allows people to keep in touch with their friends and relatives regardless the far distances.

However

this

is not much important since in the past without phones, people still could connect with the others who were far away from them by sending letters by hand to post office. In conclusion, mobile phones bring citizens with some advantages related to contacting easily, but the disappearance of it almost does not affect

people

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peoples

’ lives because of the existence of post office. And obviously,

this

is outweighed by a number of

disadvantages including

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disadvantages, including

social, medical and technology problems

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There are social, medical and technology problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What forms do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of the mobile phones?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people say that universities should only accept the young students with the highest marks. However, others think that universities should accept people of all ages that may not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

You are taking a course at a local college. The deadline for your project was last week but you haven't finished it. Write a letter to your lecturer. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you haven't handed in the project yet request more time to do it.

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