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people think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion

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The increase in petrol price has been thought to be one of the most ideal solutions to deal with detrimental impacts of vehicles on
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. In the following paragraphs I will give my point of view from both negative and positive sides of
this
 statement. On the one hand, there are manifold brilliant benefits that we should pay attention to. When the cost of petrol climbs it means that those who travel by private vehicles have to pay more money on their transporting. So as
tho
in the direction of
to
 save money for other needs, more and more people are likely to choose public transportation or motor vehicles which work by using
alternative source
Suggestion
alternative sources
an alternative source
 of energy.
For instance
, without a high amount of salary, employees will choose to become train passengers to go to the office as they can save
large amount
Suggestion
large amounts
a large amount
 of money.
On the other hand
, there are many noticeable drawbacks should be taken into consideration, One those who have to use public transport they are more likely to face dozens of issues like unable to go to work on time because the delays of train, bus
...
Accept space
...
Additionally
, in developing areas
such
 as Asia, Africa...
there
Suggestion
There
 are not enough route to meet the requirements of
residents
Suggestion
the residents
 to travel by public transportation seemed to be impossible at all. To draw a conclusion, every coin has its tw
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sides
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quantifier; used with either mass or count nouns to indicate the whole number or amount of or every one of a class
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al should be considered carefully before applying to reality
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