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Many people prefer using their phones to send text these days than talking 1. What are the reasons for this? 2. Do you think the advantages are more than disadvantages?

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Nowadays, Several individuals take preference in utilizing their mobile phones to communicate in
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 rather than making calls. In my opinion, I believe cost-effectiveness and reference purposes make messaging a better choice.
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the majority
 of people choose to use their mobile phones for message because it is cost-effective.
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 is due to the outrageous charges of network providers on calls which arises from adding irrelevant tariffs to each call a user makes.
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example making
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 a minute call on MTN network is equivalent to sending four
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 messages to either the same network or another.
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, sending phone texts allows for future referencing, one can easily refer to past information or details that was
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 communicated in
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the text
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, it is more fun these days to communicate in texts, Most growing adults find it more engaging, relaxing and fun-filled to chat with their mobile phones through
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. Admittedly, while using mobile phones for
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 messages may have its drawbacks, I consider that its merits still outweigh the demerits due to the ease of expressing oneself. Most people find it easier to express themselves more with
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 messages rather than through calls.
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the vast majority
 of individuals who are prone to making grammatical blunders while communicating verbally find it quite
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easy
 to edit
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 error when it is typed. In conclusion, while texting with mobile phones may be disadvantageous, the plus points
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 as the ease of expression and editing makes it a better alternative to making calls
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